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1. It has occurred to me that one of the most important subjects that we study in school is mathematics. Although it is true that it is important to know how to read, if we do not know how to do simple arithmetic when we do some everyday kind of activity like go to the grocery store,we will not be able to keep track of our finances. It is necessary for us understand things such as interest rates on bank accounts and loans for houses or cars in order to keep track of our personal account without going bankrupt. Many people are poor not because they do not earn enough money, but because they don’t understand the mathematics behind finances.
Beside the importance that mathematics has in our finance lives, it is also important in many other parts of our lives. There is the need that we have to measure and calculate numbers when we cook, for example. In the kitchen, we have to know about mathematical functions like fractions or multiplication. Sometimes we cut amounts in half because viewer people are being cooked for or we have to double or triple amounts if a lot of people are coming over to visit us for a special occasion. Not being able to figure out the sums for cooking a cake could have final result of a terrible tasting disaster.

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Mathematics is one of the important science. Mathematics also is an important lesson in school. Mathematics is also associated with our daily lives. Such as finances, so we would be able to avoid some financial loss. We even need math in our kitchen to avoid terrible tasting for our cook.


2. The electric streetcar was popular among the people in cities in the United States after 1880. when an engineer invented a cable that could run a wire overhead to a streetcars electric engine. Because there was this overhead wire, it wasn’t necessary to have a dangerous electric rail running along the street at ground level, and this was a very important feature of the streetcars in those cities that used them.
During the next 20 or 30 years or so, for 1880 onwards, the electric streetcars was very popular with passengers in big cities all over the USA. It was not polluting, and it is was very efficient, carrying large numbers of passengers without costing very much money for the passengers. It was also profitable for the companies. However, early in the next century, automobile manufacturers and other business interest made an effort to get rid of all the streetcars. Eventually the situation was that all the streetcars disappeared, and cars completely took over all the city street.

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 The electric streetcar was popular among the people in cities in the United States after 1880.  when an engineer invented a cable that could run a wire overhead to a streetcars electric engine.It was not polluting, and it is was very efficient, carrying large numbers of passengers without costing very much money for the passengers.However, early in the next century, automobile manufacturers and other business interest made an effort to get rid of all the streetcars.